Essay
I will be studying the shots used in Ratatouille. There are many scenes in here that successfully evoke emotions in the audience so it would therefore be interesting to analyse the editing techniques used to evoke these emotions.
Summary of story
Clown is found dead in a trashcan during a kid's party.
CSI (clown scene investigation) are called to the scene. They take the body to forensics.
They see a necklace attached to the body neck belonging to a mother.
They arrest this mother. As they are leaving, they are bombarded by parents reporting stolen valuables.
One of the CSI realise that the clown had full site of the kid's mother during the party. He deducted that the clown witnessed the kid's mother stealing from the guests as the entered.
He goes to the house and finds that their valuables are there. This confirms that the other mother is not guilty and that her chain was stolen and used to strangle the clown.
Unfortunately, this idea still isn't clicking for me, I should have my story finished by now, but I'm still not happy with the logic and length of the overall story and the story, although it does make use of CSI shots, does not successfully reference it enough. Writing this story made me realise I should edge it towards a kind of series thing where the 3 clowns that are part of the CSI (Serious, Sad and Stupid) are the protagonists that go round solving murders.
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ReplyDeleteHey Bharathi,
Okay - the C S I pun is a little stroke of genius! I absolutely love the idea of a team of clowns investigating, but again, you just keep filling your story with 'and then, and then, and then...'
How about re-frame your 1 minute narrative as a TRAILER for the series of Clown Crime Scene Investigation... (you need the word crime in there still and CCSI still works) see below:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KvS7fZ6T0Ew
Therefore - what you need to generate is a series of short, sharp scenes that introduce your 3 clown cops, show their cop car, the doors of which fall off, show all manner of dead clowns in gruesome ways, and go for that quick cutting; you'll still need to think of a 'beginning, a middle and a way to end it', but it does mean you can free yourself of all that 'and then, and then, and then' stuff... Give it some thought. There is great potential in this idea, Bharathi, I just don't think you know how long a minute lasts!
Regarding your essay - see the following 2 posts for information and guidance - pay particular attention to the suggestions in the second post as they are about you developing a more appropriate style in which to write...